Post by Captain Galaxy on Feb 13, 2008 23:30:24 GMT -8
Alright I hope everyone reads this, because it's the outline to my book that I have been developing for sometime. I am posting this to get input from people. So I would really appreciate it if everyone read it and told me if it's intriguing, interesting, etc. PLEASE READ IT!
The Setting:
The distant future. With humanity extinct as a result of nuclear holocaust, the world has become a desolate wasteland; all that remains is a race of machines that inhabit a small city. These machines are like mankind in every form, with the exception being of course that they are made of non-biological material only slightly stronger than their biological counterparts.
The Premise:
The machines are about to undertake their most ambitious project yet: to resurrect the race of man itself, along with every other species that went extinct. They successfully create the first man and the first woman, and begin nurturing them to become intelligent beings. They succeed, but not all goes according to their plan: Lilith, the woman, rebels against her masters and flees the city.
The Plot:
Of course, the Entity, a triumvirate of the most powerful and wise machines that lead the city, won’t allow this to go unpunished. They recruit three prototypes, machines that were implemented with biological brains to test the organ’s functionality. They charge these Guardians with tracking down Lilith and giving her an ultimatum, to return to the city of her own free will or be annihilated. When they reach her however there is a perplexing problem. Lilith is no longer the biological entity that she was when she abandoned the city but has mysteriously become a machine that is even stronger than those assigned to kill her. A fight ensues in which she emerges victorious, sparing only one of her pursuers, leaving him with a task to report to his superiors with a warning that the end of their time will come.
The Conflict:
The surviving Guardian returns to inform the Entity of what has occurred. They soon learn that aside from becoming a machine herself, Lilith has also raised an army of machines, and plans to attack the city. The Entity makes another attempt to create a female that will stay true to their plans; the end is result is a woman they name Eve. They charge the Guardian with protecting the humans at all costs—should the city and the machines themselves perish, the couple must survive. Along the way the Guardian must find a way to defeat Lilith and discover the source of her resolve and transformation.
The Revelation:
The whole mystery behind this conflict is a little twist on certain mythologies that I came up with. The myths in focus are those that involve men that became invulnerable except for one part of their body. For example, Achilles was dipped in a pool that made him invulnerable, except for his heels, and likewise the Persian hero Esfandiyar swam through a lake of invulnerability with his eyes closed, and those were his only vulnerable spots. The twist is based on Arthur C. Clarke’s third law: Any sufficiently advanced technology is indistinguishable from magic. I apply it to my story with the pool of invulnerability. Rather than simply being magical in making people invulnerable, the liquid is a technological substance that replaces parts of the body it comes into contact with for biologically compatible machine-like parts. The basis for this technology is probably nano technology, but that is something I will develop later. During the time of ancient Greece, one man was able to fully understand the possibilities offered by this substance. While he didn’t understand the technology, he correctly surmised that all gods were humans that had allowed themselves to be completely transformed by it. Distraught by this illusion, he sought out the lake and allowed full transformation to take place, he then sought out the “gods” and destroyed them one by one. At last he was the only “god” and was determined to make sure that he remained the only one, whenever anyone else found the lake he would immediately destroy them. He made little contact with humanity and was content to remain hidden from the rest of the world, surfacing only when he needed to.
How It Ties In To The Story:
In the 22nd century, the world was on the verge of destroying itself—a nuclear holocaust was eminent. The whole world tried desperately to find ways to survive. There arose one small special interest group that believed that finding the fountain of youth would provide them with the immortality needed to survive. But it was more than they expected, the “fountain” turned them into machines and they lived through the apocalypse and eventually found the city in which the now live. As you might have guessed, the “god” found the idea of others like him repulsive, but did not proceed to attack; although more experienced, he would’ve been no match for a large group of machines like him. He could’ve recruited an army, but the holocaust had wiped out any potential recruits and the lake could only produce machines from biological entities. He would remain in hiding and await a chance to strike again, a chance that came when the Entity created Adam and Lilith. He lured her to the wastelands and led her to the lake. He also convinced her to procure the embryos that belonged to the animals the Entity was creating, and from these he made her a race of subordinate machines.
The Allegory:
Aside from the aforementioned mythological references, there are other biblical allegories you might have noticed. The city is pretty much a Garden of Eden. The Entity, a triumvirate, is representative of the Father, the Son, and the Holy Ghost, which in my book will be a sort of walking hologram. The first part of the story pretty much follows the apocryphal story of Adam and Lilith, found in the Hebrew bible. According to that story, Lilith, not Eve, was the first wife of Adam. But she was rebellious, and during sex would refuse to lie beneath Adam, and thus fled the Garden of Eden. After complaint from Adam, God sent three angels to get her back, but she refused and as a result God made Eve. The story further mentions that Lilith ended up by the red sea, where she would give birth to a hundred demons each day, replaced by machines in my book. Of course, in my book Lilith leaves because she is lured by the "Machine God" and not because she refuses to submit to Adam. The “Machine God” will play a role in the book similar to Satan, trying to tempt the new Adam and Eve as Lilith lays siege to the city. The Guardians are substitutes for the Angels.
The Philosophy:
It's pretty much a feminist and peace-promoting book. In the end the Entity realizes the reason Lilith was so easily dissuaded was because she did not like the whole submission thing. Thus they create Adam and Eve as equals, and that given this second chance will begin and lead a new age of man into prosperity.
Hope you guys enjoy this "little" outline. I will begin writing this as soon as possible and will post the chapters online as I finish them. Thanks for READING, and your input!
The Setting:
The distant future. With humanity extinct as a result of nuclear holocaust, the world has become a desolate wasteland; all that remains is a race of machines that inhabit a small city. These machines are like mankind in every form, with the exception being of course that they are made of non-biological material only slightly stronger than their biological counterparts.
The Premise:
The machines are about to undertake their most ambitious project yet: to resurrect the race of man itself, along with every other species that went extinct. They successfully create the first man and the first woman, and begin nurturing them to become intelligent beings. They succeed, but not all goes according to their plan: Lilith, the woman, rebels against her masters and flees the city.
The Plot:
Of course, the Entity, a triumvirate of the most powerful and wise machines that lead the city, won’t allow this to go unpunished. They recruit three prototypes, machines that were implemented with biological brains to test the organ’s functionality. They charge these Guardians with tracking down Lilith and giving her an ultimatum, to return to the city of her own free will or be annihilated. When they reach her however there is a perplexing problem. Lilith is no longer the biological entity that she was when she abandoned the city but has mysteriously become a machine that is even stronger than those assigned to kill her. A fight ensues in which she emerges victorious, sparing only one of her pursuers, leaving him with a task to report to his superiors with a warning that the end of their time will come.
The Conflict:
The surviving Guardian returns to inform the Entity of what has occurred. They soon learn that aside from becoming a machine herself, Lilith has also raised an army of machines, and plans to attack the city. The Entity makes another attempt to create a female that will stay true to their plans; the end is result is a woman they name Eve. They charge the Guardian with protecting the humans at all costs—should the city and the machines themselves perish, the couple must survive. Along the way the Guardian must find a way to defeat Lilith and discover the source of her resolve and transformation.
The Revelation:
The whole mystery behind this conflict is a little twist on certain mythologies that I came up with. The myths in focus are those that involve men that became invulnerable except for one part of their body. For example, Achilles was dipped in a pool that made him invulnerable, except for his heels, and likewise the Persian hero Esfandiyar swam through a lake of invulnerability with his eyes closed, and those were his only vulnerable spots. The twist is based on Arthur C. Clarke’s third law: Any sufficiently advanced technology is indistinguishable from magic. I apply it to my story with the pool of invulnerability. Rather than simply being magical in making people invulnerable, the liquid is a technological substance that replaces parts of the body it comes into contact with for biologically compatible machine-like parts. The basis for this technology is probably nano technology, but that is something I will develop later. During the time of ancient Greece, one man was able to fully understand the possibilities offered by this substance. While he didn’t understand the technology, he correctly surmised that all gods were humans that had allowed themselves to be completely transformed by it. Distraught by this illusion, he sought out the lake and allowed full transformation to take place, he then sought out the “gods” and destroyed them one by one. At last he was the only “god” and was determined to make sure that he remained the only one, whenever anyone else found the lake he would immediately destroy them. He made little contact with humanity and was content to remain hidden from the rest of the world, surfacing only when he needed to.
How It Ties In To The Story:
In the 22nd century, the world was on the verge of destroying itself—a nuclear holocaust was eminent. The whole world tried desperately to find ways to survive. There arose one small special interest group that believed that finding the fountain of youth would provide them with the immortality needed to survive. But it was more than they expected, the “fountain” turned them into machines and they lived through the apocalypse and eventually found the city in which the now live. As you might have guessed, the “god” found the idea of others like him repulsive, but did not proceed to attack; although more experienced, he would’ve been no match for a large group of machines like him. He could’ve recruited an army, but the holocaust had wiped out any potential recruits and the lake could only produce machines from biological entities. He would remain in hiding and await a chance to strike again, a chance that came when the Entity created Adam and Lilith. He lured her to the wastelands and led her to the lake. He also convinced her to procure the embryos that belonged to the animals the Entity was creating, and from these he made her a race of subordinate machines.
The Allegory:
Aside from the aforementioned mythological references, there are other biblical allegories you might have noticed. The city is pretty much a Garden of Eden. The Entity, a triumvirate, is representative of the Father, the Son, and the Holy Ghost, which in my book will be a sort of walking hologram. The first part of the story pretty much follows the apocryphal story of Adam and Lilith, found in the Hebrew bible. According to that story, Lilith, not Eve, was the first wife of Adam. But she was rebellious, and during sex would refuse to lie beneath Adam, and thus fled the Garden of Eden. After complaint from Adam, God sent three angels to get her back, but she refused and as a result God made Eve. The story further mentions that Lilith ended up by the red sea, where she would give birth to a hundred demons each day, replaced by machines in my book. Of course, in my book Lilith leaves because she is lured by the "Machine God" and not because she refuses to submit to Adam. The “Machine God” will play a role in the book similar to Satan, trying to tempt the new Adam and Eve as Lilith lays siege to the city. The Guardians are substitutes for the Angels.
The Philosophy:
It's pretty much a feminist and peace-promoting book. In the end the Entity realizes the reason Lilith was so easily dissuaded was because she did not like the whole submission thing. Thus they create Adam and Eve as equals, and that given this second chance will begin and lead a new age of man into prosperity.
Hope you guys enjoy this "little" outline. I will begin writing this as soon as possible and will post the chapters online as I finish them. Thanks for READING, and your input!
